Rough Cut feedback from Tanya

Although this is very short at the moment, your ideas are quite clearly expressed.
In terms of what you can do next:

Make sure that all of the shots have a consistency of filter and effect.
You need to cover the track a couple more times and have at least one of the performances include a direct address to camera.
Cut back and forth through the lines more ie rather than cut at the end of the line, cut in the middle of the line or multiple times.